Hark! Is that a phone I hear ringing??
It calls to me, perhaps it is the call I have been waiting hours for!
I rush over to the phone
I told him to call me,
He said he would.
God, he's so incredibly hot!
Bubbling with hope I answer.
"Hello?"
"Is your refrigerator running?"
damn.
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Funny!!!!
i dont know what to say.
your verbs are well chosen and nouns are okay.
'is YOUR refrigerator running?"
i like how you ended it. .
maybe instead of rush run over to the phone.
haha, that's really good!
I like the ending, a lot.
I hate when that happens.
hehe...heee...heh. you are amazing. there's really no criticism i can give you. and not just because i'm afraid you'll eat my face like mackenzie. she doesn't take criticism well...
haha! i love this! its awesome. its really funny and has a great ending.
i like the prank phone caller, very funny.
I have already expressed my emotions for this story through my laughter and words like "amazing" and "supercalifristalisticexbeealadocious"
I like it how t his poem is so not you in the beginning, because you're all "boo love" but the end it is a total Robyn moment. It starts out with this overly fantasy like setting, and then ends in total humor.
Hahaha. You built up all the excitement just to finish with a stupid refrigerator. Nice. I love how when you first read this it kind of random and stuff but then when you think about it, there's a conflict and characters even though it's not very elaborate.
Anyway, great job. :)
(: and I can see how people can relate. i really liked it.
i like your ending a TON. Your verbs are very clear and you obviously took the time to choose perfect ones. :)
This is funny. I think it could be a bit more clear at the beginning.
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